SPOILER Discussion for The Wrong Lance

This is a place where those who wish to do so may talk over The Wrong Lance.

Since The Wrong Lance is, at heart, a Splinter, I’m unclear in my own mind whether spoilers, as such, might be a danger.  However, I think it fair to say that if you are avoiding The Wrong Lance, or are waiting to read it until the final chapter has posted, or until there is an ebook compilation — then you may not want to venture into comments.

For those who want to Talk About It — the Comment Section is yours.  Have fun!



  1. Gareth Griffiths’s avatar

    I think a lot of the issues we see with pacing etc would probably have been resolved later in the writing process. I get the feeling a lot of times the book gets smoothed out later in the reviewing process and scenes sometimes move around or new scenes get added to round off rough edges. We don’t normally get to see things at this stage – hats of to Steve and Sharon for allowing us to see it. Splinters are great fun – wonder whether the splinter of when Van Con got re-attached would have been revised and re-purposed…


  2. DC’s avatar

    While I agree that E12 doesn’t act like the other Clutch, she does remind me of The Watcher on AoC in that she is young and doesn’t have the best judgment yet, or the Clutch Mother in the short story. This alternate draft is interesting and I was seeing possibilities until Ch 9 when too many characters broke characterization. Please keep the chapters coming.


  3. Rick Boatright’s avatar

    I look forward to part 11 and more so to the author’s afterword.


  4. Mary Terry’s avatar

    Love the duo cycle chase and Theo’s jump.


  5. Nickola’s avatar

    I find this fascinating reading, especially as I am caught between really enjoying the writing – as always, it is compelling – and finding the pace just far too quick – it reads as though everything is on fast forward.

    In addition, I agree with the other comments about Emissary 12 behaving in a non-characteristic Clutch way.

    Can I re-iterate that I am enjoying reading the splinter anyway – it may not be what happens in the actual Lance, but it continues to round out the characters.
    Keep up the good work!


  6. kat.’s avatar

    And you just had to leave us dangling from a cliff, didn’t you?!
    Have thoroughly enjoyed The Wrong Lance, but agree the published version is a better story.
    Nonetheless…that cliff!


  7. Fred Smith’s avatar

    in Chapter ten, I find this, right up at the top:

    The frigid wind slapped his face until it burned; his nose went numb, and his eyes teared, despite the googles,

    where can I get some googles like his? ;}


    1. Sharon’s avatar

      Well, yanno. It was spelled right. Will fix.


      1. Fred Smith’s avatar

        And I found another instance of the same misspelling later. if you just search for google you’ll find it.

        Looks like a spellcheck-o to me.

        Thanks, Sharon, I’m enjoying reading this!



      2. David’s avatar

        Interesting experience reading this. This would seem to have been leading to major conflict with the Clutch, possibly an internal civil war for them, which would go over oddly. I’m enjoying reading it, but the right lance fits the rest of the story better.


      3. David Daily’s avatar

        I just found The Wrong Lance and am fascinated by the differences with the actual Lance. This is a much darker version of Liad than the published series. I think I prefer the version published tho I find what you originally wrote to be very thought provoking and offers insights into some characters that were left out. I am looking forward to reading more chapters.


      4. Phyllis Shute’s avatar

        I’m enjoying chapter 8. Theo finally engaged in clan affairs. I wonder what the pathfinders come up with in the way of rescue…a group effort…. recipe for success.


      5. Mary Allen’s avatar

        This direction would have made Theo a much more central character, as a victim rather than as a logic driven mediator. I appreciate being able to read the wrong lance and agree that Emissary 12 doesn’t act like previous Clutch.


      6. Drammar’s avatar

        Yes, that was where it went away from what I expected as well. And then the very idea by Emissary Twelve that cats may be enemies was jarring to me — will have to go back and read the real Lance to see if it really happened that way.

        I wonder what will become of Miri’s “conversation” with Val Con?


      7. Othin’s avatar

        I’m very glad to have the wrong lance experience. Thank you!

        There are a lot of differences and in most chapters I find something that gets better handled in the right lance.
        For example 2. Chapter left me feeling rushed. The action was picking up to much speed too early, imho. And that was entirely done by placing the Chapter so early.

        Also comparing the variations of Emissary 12 – I find the diplomat in the right lance far more believable and in tune with what we know so far about the Clutch. The right lance also avoids the question of how the Clutch elders got their Emissary not only woken but also to Surebleak in 1 day. That’s awfully fast for their kind of drive. And truly, a possible conflict with the Clutch elders feels quite unnecessary. Emissary 12 (in the right lance) also seems quite capable of gathering discreetly additional info for the elders – so if the destroying of one universe has to come up again – that’ll be still an option.

        Getting the Strongarms back on Bechimo is a similar situation. Having them first interviewed by a mercenary captain and explained why that placing isn’t going to work before re-joining them with Theo and her crew is a far more satisfying scenario.

        Another, thing I find interesting is, that while some chapters differ very much, others don’t.


      8. justdave’s avatar

        Interesting and quite different

        to me I began seeing it “go off the rails” with a very different Emissary 12 scenario, would the Elders treat Edger this way? Val Con is a clan brother.

        going to be interesting, in a Chinese way, to see what Bechimo does next!



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